视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more fluent and natural by reducing hesitations and simplifying sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct casual grammar (e.g., “when I go on a trip”, “I want to keep them in my memory”).

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For example, when I go on a trip I always photograph landscapes and cityscapes to remember the places I visit. Also, I often take several shots at different times of day to capture the best light.

建議: Be accurate and concise. Begin with a direct statement of preference, then give specific reasons and use correct vocabulary (e.g., “rural scenery”, “nature”, “take pictures”). Avoid repetition and keep to two or three sentences.

範例: I prefer rural scenery to urban views because I enjoy natural landscapes such as mountains and the sea. The quiet, open spaces and fresh air make rural scenes more relaxing and photogenic for me.

建議: Make your answer clearer and more varied. State your preference directly, then give specific reasons and an example. Avoid fillers and repetition. Use linking words like “because” or “for example” to structure the response.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they feel new and different from what I usually see at home. For example, I enjoyed photographing traditional architecture and coastal landscapes on my last trip, which offered fresh perspectives I hadn’t seen before.

× Yes I do, especially when I go, uh, trip.

✓ Yes I do, especially when I go on a trip.

The verb phrase 'go trip' is missing the preposition 'on' required for the collocation 'go on a trip'. This is a sentence structure and preposition usage issue. Suggestion: use 'go on a trip' or 'travel' to express this idea.

× And because there are different views from where I live, so I wanna take them in my memory.

✓ Because there are different views where I live, I want to keep them in my memory.

Using both 'because' and 'so' together is redundant; this is a conjunction/ sentence structure error. Also 'wanna' is informal; use 'want to', and 'take them in my memory' is unnatural — use 'keep them in my memory' or 'remember them'. Suggestion: remove redundancy and choose natural verb phrase.

× I prefer a view of rural science because I love natural natures like mountains and sea, so I love taking picture of rural areas.

✓ I prefer rural scenery because I love natural features like mountains and the sea, so I love taking pictures of rural areas.

Several problems: 'a view of rural science' is incorrect word choice ('scenery' fits). 'Natural natures' is ungrammatical; use 'natural features' or simply 'nature'. 'Sea' needs the definite article 'the sea'. 'Taking picture' needs plural 'pictures'. These are issues with word choice, quantifiers/articles, and pluralization. Suggestion: use 'rural scenery', 'natural features', 'the sea', and 'pictures'.

× I like to see other countries.

✓ I like to visit other countries.

'See other countries' is understandable but not the natural collocation when talking about travel; the verb 'visit' or 'travel to' is more appropriate. This is a preposition/verb choice issue. Suggestion: say 'visit other countries' or 'travel to other countries' to convey travel intent.

× That's why I love to go on a trip.

✓ That's why I love going on trips.

Repetition 'go on a trip' is grammatical but using the gerund plural 'going on trips' is more natural when speaking about a general preference. This is a sentence structure/style suggestion. Suggestion: use 'going on trips' to indicate habitual action.

× Umm, because I, I love it because it's, uh, pretty new for me.

✓ I love it because it's quite new to me.

The original has redundant 'because' and fillers and the phrase 'pretty new for me' is slightly off; use 'quite new to me'. This is a sentence structure and preposition choice issue. Suggestion: remove redundancy and fillers, use 'quite new to me' or 'new for me' with consistent preposition 'to'.