视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitations and repetitive phrases; give a clear topic sentence and two concise supporting points with linking words. Be specific about what you capture and why to show richer content and vocabulary.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me preserve beautiful moments and explore visual details. For example, I often photograph sunsets to capture their colors and cityscapes to study architectural patterns.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence, use linking words, and add specific contrasting details and examples (e.g., types of rural scenes) to make your answer more vivid and convincing.

範例: I prefer rural views because they offer open landscapes and natural features that cities lack. For instance, I enjoy photographing rolling rice terraces and forested mountains, which create a calm atmosphere compared with crowded urban streets.

建議: Avoid vague comparisons and hesitations; state a clear reason and give specific examples with brief descriptions. Correct minor grammar (e.g., 'one of the most beautiful beaches') and avoid saying 'like other countries' without clarity.

範例: I prefer views in my country because I am familiar with its diverse landscapes and cultural significance. For example, Da Nang’s beaches have fine sand and clear water, and the northern mountains offer dramatic terraced fields that I love to photograph.

× I want to uh, save the beautiful moments, uh, forever.

✓ I want to save the beautiful moments forever.

Remove filler words and commas; 'save' is base verb and correctly used. No past participle needed. Keep concise for clarity.

× So I usually take pictures of beautiful views.

✓ I usually take pictures of beautiful views.

Original is acceptable but had redundant 'So'. Removed to improve sentence flow and formality.

× Uh, Secondly, I umm, admire.

✓ Secondly, I admire beautiful views.

The original sentence fragment 'I admire.' is incomplete in context. Adding the object 'beautiful views' completes the thought and removes fillers.

× I like to admire beautiful views, so I choose to.

✓ I like to admire beautiful views, so I choose to take photographs of them.

The phrase 'choose to' is incomplete; specify the action 'take photographs of them' to complete the sentence and clarify meaning.

× Firstly, views in rural areas are beautiful and wonderful.

✓ Firstly, the views in rural areas are beautiful and wonderful.

Using 'the' makes the noun phrase definite and refers to the general category of views being discussed. Alternatively, omitting article is acceptable ('Views in rural areas...') but adding 'the' improves specificity.

× Secondly, rural areas often have views that cannot appear in urban area.

✓ Secondly, rural areas often have views that do not appear in urban areas.

Use plural 'areas' for consistency and 'do not appear' is the standard negative present form. 'Cannot appear' is unnatural here.

× They are full of trees, mountains.

✓ They are full of trees and mountains.

List items should be connected with a conjunction; replace comma before final item with 'and' to form a proper coordinated list.

× There's a lot of beautiful landscapes in my country.

✓ There are a lot of beautiful landscapes in my country.

'Landscapes' is plural, so use 'there are' instead of singular 'there's' for correct subject-verb agreement.

× For example, in Vietnam we have one of the most beautiful beach in the world like uh Danang.

✓ For example, in Vietnam we have one of the most most beautiful beaches in the world, such as Danang.

Use plural 'beaches' after 'one of the most' and replace 'like' with 'such as' to introduce an example. Also remove filler and fix punctuation.

× Or we also have umm, other wonderful mountains like other countries.

✓ We also have other wonderful mountains similar to those in other countries.

Original 'like other countries' incorrectly compares 'mountains' to 'countries'. Use 'similar to those in other countries' to compare mountains with mountains in other countries and remove filler words.