音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve fluency by reducing hesitations and repetitions, and make the response more coherent with a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, 'because', 'so', 'when') correctly and avoid unclear phrases like 'simple job' that confuse meaning. Aim for 2–4 concise sentences: state preference, give two clear reasons with brief examples, and keep vocabulary appropriate (e.g., 'uplift' instead of 'promote me to do more').

範例: I prefer happy songs because they make me feel energetic and uplift my mood. For example, when I need to do repetitive tasks, upbeat music helps me stay focused and motivated. Also, when I feel down, listening to cheerful music usually brightens my mood quickly.

建議: Reduce repetition and tighten the structure: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so'), and provide a brief example. Replace vague phrases ('those like happy music') with precise wording ('upbeat songs' or 'cheerful tracks'). Keep response to 1–3 polished sentences.

範例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me more excited because upbeat rhythms and bright melodies boost my energy. For instance, when I'm feeling stressed, a lively song can quickly lift my spirits and make me feel more positive and active.

× I definitely prefer happy songs because it makes me feel fun and energetic.

✓ I definitely prefer happy songs because they make me feel happy and energetic.

Subject 'happy songs' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes' (third person plural agreement). Also 'feel fun' is unnatural; use 'feel happy' or 'feel good' for emotion. Grammar problem type ID:2

× So whenever I, I, I do like simple job, which I don't like to do.

✓ So whenever I have to do simple jobs, which I don't like to do, I...

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Do like simple job' should be 'have to do simple jobs' to convey obligation; plurality 'jobs' fits habit. This fixes sentence structure and verb usage. Grammar problem type ID:26

× And also I'm when I'm depressed, I definitely, I definitely choose to play that songs, uh, to, uh, to promote me to do more.

✓ And when I'm depressed, I definitely choose to play those songs to motivate myself to do more.

Use 'those songs' (plural) not 'that songs'. 'Promote me' is incorrect; use 'motivate myself' or 'encourage myself'. 'Myself' is the correct reflexive pronoun for the subject. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yeah, of course it makes me feel more excited because I think because of the rhythm and also the mood of the music.

✓ Yeah, of course it makes me feel more excited because of the rhythm and the mood of the music.

This sentence is mostly correct but wordy: remove the repeated 'because I think because'. 'It makes' refers to 'happy music' singular concept so third-person singular 'makes' is correct. Simplify for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:2

× So when I listen to those like happy music, whenever I feel depressed, I I, I become happier.

✓ So when I listen to happy music whenever I feel depressed, I become happier.

Use 'happy music' without 'those like' (awkward phrasing). Maintain present tense 'listen' and 'become' for habitual action. Remove filler repetitions. Grammar problem type ID:6