音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (singular/plural and article use), and give a brief specific reason. Use one or two linking words if you add details. Aim for 2–3 sentences and avoid phrases like "on the basis of my opinion."

範例: I prefer happy music. It lifts my mood and has upbeat rhythms and catchy melodies, so I usually choose it when I want to feel energized.

建議: Answer directly with a clear present-tense statement, reduce hesitation and repetition, and give a specific example or situation. Use one linking word to connect reason or result. Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited. For example, when I'm stressed after studying, I play upbeat pop songs which quickly improve my mood and help me concentrate.

× On the basis of my opinion, I definitely prefer the happy song because of their vibes and the style.

✓ In my opinion, I definitely prefer happy songs because of their vibe and style.

The phrase 'On the basis of my opinion' is wordy and unidiomatic; 'In my opinion' is natural. 'The happy song' implies a specific single song, but the student means happy songs in general, so use the plural 'happy songs' (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). 'Their vibes' mismatches with 'song' (singular); changing to 'their vibe' matches plural 'songs'. Also 'the style' is fine but 'style' without 'the' is more natural here when speaking generally. Suggestion: use concise, natural phrases and ensure pronoun agreement with the noun number. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Hmm definitely happy music made me more uh, excited.

✓ Hmm, happy music definitely makes me more excited.

The question asks generally whether happy music makes you feel more excited, so present tense should be used to indicate general truth or habitual response (Present tense issue, ID 6). The original used past tense 'made' which incorrectly suggests a single past event. Also move 'definitely' to natural position. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual/general effects: 'happy music makes me...'. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× And also whenever I feel stressed and depressed, I prefer to listen to happy music which is my first priority whenever I am depressed.

✓ Also, whenever I feel stressed or depressed, I prefer to listen to happy music; it is my first priority when I am feeling down.

The sentence is repetitive ('whenever I feel... whenever I am depressed') and awkwardly structured. Using 'or' is more natural when listing alternative feelings. 'Which is my first priority' is an incorrect clause attachment; replace with a clear independent clause 'it is my first priority'. 'Whenever I am depressed' repeats the idea; 'when I am feeling down' is concise. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same idea and break long sentences into clearer clauses, maintain parallel structure. Grammar problem type ID: 26