音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve accuracy, fluency and coherence: correct minor vocabulary errors, avoid redundancy, and add a brief supporting detail with a linking word. Use one clear topic sentence then one specific example. Also keep answer within 3–4 sentences and watch word choices (e.g., 'sizing' is incorrect—use the intended activity).

範例: I prefer happy, upbeat music because it helps me feel relaxed and more positive. For example, when I work or study, I often play cheerful songs to stay motivated and maintain a good mood.

建議: Focus on pronunciation and word choice, and make your response more natural and concise. Start with a direct answer, then give one clear, specific example using proper vocabulary (e.g., 'loud' or 'upbeat' songs instead of 'your big songs') and correct grammar (avoid fragments like 'I immediately put me in a better mood').

範例: Yes, definitely — happy music makes me feel more energetic and upbeat. For example, when I listen to loud, upbeat songs I want to dance or sing along, and they instantly lift my mood.

× I often listen to cheerful songs while working or sizing because they help me stay motivated and improve my mood.

✓ I often listen to cheerful songs while working or studying because they help me stay motivated and improve my mood.

The word 'sizing' is incorrect in this context; likely the speaker meant 'studying'. This is a vocabulary choice error rather than grammar, but it affects sentence clarity. Replace with the appropriate -ing form 'studying' to match 'working' and to form a parallel structure. Suggestion: choose the correct verb that fits the context and use its -ing form for parallelism.

× Having music makes me feel more energetic and uplifted.

✓ Listening to music makes me feel more energetic and uplifted.

'Having music' is awkward and unidiomatic. The intended meaning is expressed by the gerund 'listening to music'. Using 'listening to' clarifies the action that causes the feeling. Suggestion: use the correct gerund phrase that matches the action.

× For example, when I listen to your big songs, I want to move or sing along and I immediately put me in a better mood.

✓ For example, when I listen to upbeat songs, I want to move or sing along and they immediately put me in a better mood.

Several issues: 'your big songs' is incorrect pronoun and adjective use — likely intended 'upbeat songs'. 'I immediately put me in a better mood' is ungrammatical because the subject 'they' (the songs) should perform the action; 'I put me' is reflexive and wrong here. Correct form: 'they immediately put me in a better mood' where 'they' refers to the songs. Suggestions: use the correct noun phrase ('upbeat songs') and ensure subject and object pronouns agree ('they put me').