自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Correct the grammar (use past tense consistently), be concise, and add a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Replace fillers (uh) and unclear phrases (UH-3) with specific, natural vocabulary. For example, say when you had it and why it was small or had training wheels.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bike with training wheels because I couldn’t balance on two wheels yet. I remember riding it in my neighborhood every afternoon, which helped me gain confidence until I could ride without the training wheels.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence using correct grammar, avoid fillers, and give one specific reason or example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) to make your answer coherent. Correct plural/singular errors and word order.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, people of all ages ride bicycles for commuting and exercise because they are affordable and convenient in crowded cities.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was a child') so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Have' is present tense; change to 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for events that happened in the past.

× It is a small bike and it has UH-3 wheels because I can't balance my bike when it only has two wheels.

✓ It was a small bike and it had three wheels because I couldn't balance the bike when it only had two wheels.

Tense should match the past context, so 'is/has/can't' should be 'was/had/couldn't'. 'UH-3' appears to be a filler plus a number; write 'three' clearly. Also change 'my bike' to 'the bike' in the subordinate clause to avoid repetition and maintain clarity. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use clear number words.

× This is quite popular in my country, uh, people from young to adults, uh, riding a bikes.

✓ Bicycles are quite popular in my country; people of all ages ride bikes.

The original mixes present phrasing awkwardly and contains number and word order errors. Use plural subject 'bicycles' with present tense 'are' to state a general truth. 'People of all ages' is the correct expression instead of 'people from young to adults'. Use base verb 'ride' after 'people' and plural noun 'bikes' (not 'a bikes'). Suggestion: simplify the sentence structure, use correct age phrase, and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun plurality.