自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and clarity: use past tense consistently, combine short fragments into coherent sentences, avoid filler words, and add one specific detail. Keep within 3–4 sentences. For example, begin with a clear topic sentence, then say who bought it, when, and how quickly you learned.

範例: Yes. I had my own bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for me when I was about five, and she taught me to ride it in about two hours. I still remember feeling proud when I rode it down the street for the first time.

建議: Work on accuracy and coherence: correct vocabulary (ride, not right/write), use present simple for general facts, avoid hesitations, and give a clear reason or example. Structure the response: state whether they are popular, then give two supporting reasons (e.g., convenience, culture), using linking words like 'because' or 'for example.'

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in Taiwan. Many people use them for short trips and exercise, and bike-sharing systems make cycling convenient in cities. For example, on weekends you can see families and commuters riding bicycles along park paths and bike lanes.

× When I was young, I have my own bike for myself.

✓ When I was young, I had my own bike.

The sentence refers to a past time (When I was young) but uses the present tense 'have'. Use past simple 'had' for past states. Also 'for myself' is redundant and unnatural; remove it.

× My mother bought me a bicycle, uh, when I was maybe 5 years old and they teach me how to ride it.

✓ My mother bought me a bicycle when I was about five years old and she taught me how to ride it.

The clause begins in past simple ('bought') so the coordinated clause should also be past simple ('taught'). 'They' is incorrect as the subject because the mother is singular; use 'she'. Use 'about five years old' instead of 'maybe 5 years old' for natural phrasing.

× I only spend about two hours that I can learn the how to cycle.

✓ I only spent about two hours learning how to cycle.

The action is in the past, so use past simple 'spent' instead of 'spend'. The structure 'that I can learn the how to cycle' is ungrammatical; use the gerund 'learning' and omit the extra article 'the'.

× I think that's quite.

✓ I think that was enough.

The original sentence 'that's quite' is incomplete and unclear. In context, the student likely means the time was sufficient, so rephrase to a complete sentence 'that was enough' to convey meaning.

× In Taiwan we can see a lot of people are right on the road.

✓ In Taiwan we can see a lot of people riding on the road.

The verb 'right' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'ride'. Use 'riding on the road' to describe people on bicycles. Alternatively 'on the road' is acceptable with 'riding'.

× Umm, so that should be quite popular in Taiwan and also umm, some people prefer to write motorbike, but to be honest, uh, they will try to ride their bicycle in the Saturday because.

✓ So bicycles are quite popular in Taiwan, and some people prefer to ride motorbikes, but to be honest, they try to ride their bicycles on Saturdays.

Mixed tense and word choice errors: use present simple 'are' for general fact. 'Write motorbike' is incorrect; use 'ride motorbikes'. 'In the Saturday' should be 'on Saturdays' for habitual actions. Remove filler 'because' at end or complete the clause; here it's removed and sentence made coherent.