自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce repetition and grammar errors, and make the story clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words. Keep the response within 3–4 sentences.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my older siblings did. They often rode around the neighborhood and would let me sit on the back, which I remember fondly. Those rides made me feel included and excited to learn to ride later.

建議: Remove fillers, correct grammar, and organize reasons with linking words. Begin with a clear statement, then give two specific, coherent reasons with linking words (for example, because/also). Use precise vocabulary (commute, affordable, workplaces) and avoid redundant phrases.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and help people avoid traffic. For example, students and office workers often cycle to universities and workplaces since it is cheaper and faster than driving a car.

× No, I didn't didn't have a bike when I was a child but my siblings used to have one.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my siblings used to have one.

The sentence contains a duplicated auxiliary 'didn't didn't' which is ungrammatical. Remove the extra 'didn't'. Also add a comma before 'but' to join the independent clauses clearly. Use past simple 'didn't have' to indicate absence in the past.

× That is a fond memory of my childhood where they used to rode the bike and made let me sit in the back seat.

✓ That is a fond memory of my childhood when they used to ride the bike and let me sit in the back seat.

Multiple errors: 'where' is not the best connector for memories of time—use 'when'. 'Used to rode' mixes 'used to' with a past-tense verb; after 'used to' the base form 'ride' is required. 'Made let me' is incorrect; use the simple verb 'let' to indicate permission. These corrections keep the past habitual sense.

× Uh, yes, I believe by so very popular in my country because, uh, it is less expensive and easy commute to the offices, universities and to them businesses workplace and it is much cheaper than uh, driving your own car.

✓ Uh, yes, I believe bikes are very popular in my country because they are less expensive and make it easy to commute to offices, universities, and workplaces, and they are much cheaper than driving your own car.

Problems corrected: 'by so very popular' is ungrammatical—use 'very popular'. Explicit subject 'bikes' is needed for clarity. Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to bikes (subject-pronoun agreement). 'Easy commute to the offices' should be 'make it easy to commute to offices' — restructure to use a verb phrase. 'Them businesses workplace' is incorrect; use 'workplaces' or 'businesses' (plural noun) and do not combine 'them'. Maintain present simple 'are' to describe general truth. These changes improve grammar, agreement, and clarity.