自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more grammatically correct: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses (use past tense for childhood), avoid repetition, and keep it within 3–4 sentences. For example, say you had a bike, who gave it to you, how you learned to ride, and a brief feeling or result.

範例: Yes, I did. My grandfather bought me a small bike when I was five, and I learned to ride on one with four wheels at first. After falling a few times, which hurt a little, I practised until I could switch to a two-wheeled bike, and I felt proud when I succeeded.

建議: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'however'). Use accurate terms (bicycle vs motorcycle) and avoid hesitations. Keep sentences concise and coherent.

範例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. The main reasons are safety and infrastructure: for example, there are few bike lanes, so riding is dangerous, and most people prefer motorcycles or cars for faster travel.

× When I was a child, I have a bike my grandfather bought me a bike.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike that my grandfather bought me.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was a child') so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Have' is present tense; change to 'had'. Also remove the duplicated phrase 'a bike' and add 'that' to connect the clauses clearly.

× I start with the four wheel and I fall sometime but it it hurts but it's fun and then I change to two wheels.

✓ I started with four wheels and I sometimes fell; it hurt, but it was fun, and then I switched to two wheels.

The events happened in the past, so verbs should be past tense: 'start' -> 'started', 'fall' -> 'fell', 'change' -> 'switched'. Use 'sometimes' for correct adverb position. Remove duplicate 'it'. Use past forms 'hurt' and 'was' to maintain past narrative consistency.

× In my country bike is not popular that much.

✓ In my country, bikes are not that popular.

Countable noun 'bike' should be plural when speaking generally ('bikes'). Verb and noun number must agree: 'bikes are'. Also change word order to more natural phrasing: 'not that popular'. Add a comma after introductory phrase.

× Mostly people use bicycle and car.

✓ Mostly people use bicycles and cars.

Parallel and plural forms are required when listing general items. Use plural countable nouns 'bicycles' and 'cars'.

× No, I mean motorcycle.

✓ No, I mean motorcycles.

To correct the clarification and keep the general statement, use the plural 'motorcycles' to match the previous general reference to vehicles.

× And because they don't have a bike lane and it's very dangerous to bike in my city so. Uh it.

✓ Because there are no bike lanes and it is very dangerous to cycle in my city, people avoid biking.

The original is fragmented and has redundancy ('and' plus 'so' together) and an unfinished phrase. Use 'there are no bike lanes' (correct 'there be' construction) and 'it is' for clarity. Replace 'bike' (verb) with 'cycle' or 'bike' as verb consistently; end with a complete clause explaining the consequence. Remove filler 'Uh it'.