休息— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence naming the place, then add one or two specific activities using correct vocabulary and grammar. Avoid hesitations, repetitions and pronunciation errors. Use linking words (for example, 'there I usually...') to connect supporting details.

範例: Recently I have been going to the National Pass near my house to relax. There I usually go for walks or bike rides, and sometimes I run on the trails to unwind after a busy day.

建議: Begin with a clear statement of who you relax with, then give one or two specific reasons or typical activities. Use correct pronouns and avoid filler words. Use a linking word such as 'because' or 'and' to make the explanation coherent.

範例: I usually relax with my younger brother. We often go cycling or grab something to eat together because I feel comfortable with him and we can relax and talk freely.

建議: Answer directly, then give a clear reason and one specific example. Use correct verb forms and avoid unclear scientific claims unless accurate. Replace hesitations with short pauses and use linking words like 'because' or 'for example.'

範例: Yes, I do. Listening to music helps me calm down because it distracts me from stress. For example, when I'm anxious I play slow instrumental music and it makes me feel more relaxed.

建議: Provide a short topic sentence listing your main relaxation activities, then explain briefly why they help, using clear vocabulary and correct grammar. Avoid unclear phrases and reduce repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example.'

範例: To relax I usually listen to music or watch comedy films. These activities make me laugh and lift my mood, for example a funny movie will help me forget stress after a long day.

× Recently I went to the pass National Pass, uh, nearby my, my house, which is the place that I can relax and unwind.

✓ Recently I went to the nearby National Park, which is a place where I can relax and unwind.

The sentence has awkward word order and word choice errors rather than a tense problem; however it uses past tense 'went' appropriately. I correct 'pass National Pass' to 'nearby National Park' and restructure 'which is the place that I can relax and unwind' to 'which is a place where I can relax and unwind' for natural English. Suggestion: use correct noun (park) and 'a place where' for defining clauses.

× I can do a lot of of activities there like walking, running and ride bicycle, which is the pair that I'm comfortable to go.

✓ I can do a lot of activities there, like walking, running and riding a bicycle, which is a place I feel comfortable going to.

The list of activities requires parallel -ing forms: 'walking, running and riding'. Also 'ride bicycle' needs article and correct form 'riding a bicycle'. 'which is the pair' is incorrect word choice and structure; it should be 'which is a place I feel comfortable going to'. Suggestion: keep parallel verb forms and use correct articles and nouns.

× My younger brother who is the one that I relax with, I usually ask them to go to FIFA5 together because, uh, I can be myself with, without, uh, with him and we can spend a lot of time together like uh, for something to eat or exercise.

✓ My younger brother, who is the one I relax with, I usually ask him to go to the park with me because I can be myself with him and we can spend a lot of time together, for example eating or exercising.

Pronoun 'them' is plural and does not agree with 'my younger brother' (singular); use 'him'. 'go to FIFA5' seems to be a wrong noun, likely 'the park' or desired place; corrected to 'the park'. Also phrasing 'for something to eat or exercise' is awkward; change to 'for example eating or exercising'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number and person, and use clear nouns.

× Yes, of course, of course when I, I, when I am under pressure, I usually listening to music, which is tell me relax a lot and sometime, uh, some music can, can uh, affect with our band, we should uh, release some hormone that help me really like.

✓ Yes, of course. When I am under pressure, I usually listen to music, which helps me relax a lot. Sometimes some music can affect our mood and help release hormones that really help me.

'I usually listening' is incorrect verb form; after 'usually' use base form 'listen'. 'which is tell me relax' should be 'which helps me relax'. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'affect with our band' is incorrect; likely 'affect our mood'. 'help me really like' is ungrammatical; change to 'really help me'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms after auxiliaries and adverbs, use 'help(s) + base verb' for expressing assistance, and choose correct nouns ('mood').

× I usually listen to music and watch a comedy movie to relax because when I listen to them or I wish or I watch them it's made me laugh or smile.

✓ I usually listen to music and watch comedy movies to relax because when I listen to them or watch them they make me laugh or smile.

Pronoun 'them' can refer to music and movies but 'a comedy movie' should be plural 'comedy movies' to match 'them' or change pronoun. 'it's made me laugh' has wrong tense and subject; correct is 'they make me laugh'. Also 'I wish' is misplaced and unclear; removed. Suggestion: keep agreement between subjects and pronouns and maintain consistent tense (present simple for habitual actions).

× I think it's it's Kelly leaves mindset and help me like during state period.

✓ I think it helps clear my mind and helps me during stressful periods.

The original contains unintelligible phrases 'Kelly leaves mindset' and 'during state period'. I interpret intent as 'clear my mind' and 'stressful periods'. Use verbs 'helps' with correct subject-verb agreement and plural 'periods' for repeatable times. Suggestion: use clear idiomatic expressions like 'clear my mind' and 'stressful periods' and ensure verbs agree with the subject.