梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Говорите более чётко и стройно: начните с прямого ответа, затем приведите конкретный пример. Избегайте грамматических ошибок (например, согласование времен и местоимений) и избыточных повторов. Используйте связки (for example, because, so) чтобы структура была логичной и длина ответа не превышала 3–4 предложений.

範例: I don’t usually remember my dreams clearly. However, when a dream is vivid I often write it down in a diary because that helps me recall the details later. For example, last month I wrote a strange dream about flying and could describe it to my friend the next day.

建議: Отвечайте прямо и корректно по грамматике: используйте правильные формы глаголов и предлоги. Дайте причину и пример, связав их союзами (because, so, therefore). Избегайте неуклюжих выражений (например, “wanna listing”).

範例: Yes, I often share my dreams with close friends and family because I enjoy hearing their interpretations. For instance, I once told my sister about a dream and she gave a surprising idea about what it might mean.

建議: Формулируйте мысль чётко: сначала да/нет или частичный ответ, затем поясните с конкретикой и избегайте повторов. Упражняйтесь в согласовании слов (it depends on, they can give advice). Используйте связки (if, because, when) для ясной логики.

範例: Yes, I think dreams can have meaning, but it depends on the person. For example, if someone is worried about an exam, they may dream about failing, which could reflect their anxiety rather than a prophecy.

建議: Отвечайте компактно и конкретно: дайте чёткое заявление о желании, затем кратко объясните план действий. Избегайте слов-паразитов (umm, uh) и повторов (plan to plan). Используйте правильные формы (want to, it was my big dream -> it is my big dream).

範例: Yes, I definitely want to make my dream come true. My main goal is to build a successful career in design, so I have been studying new skills and making a clear five-year plan to achieve it.

× Personally, I can't remember them very well, especially when they were very interesting and they can share with them with my friends and with my family.

✓ Personally, I can't remember them very well, especially when they were very interesting and I could share them with my friends and my family.

The sentence uses incorrect pronouns and pronoun structures ('they can share with them with my friends') and a wrong modal ('can') for past ability. Use 'I could share them' to indicate the speaker sharing dreams with others, and remove the extra 'with' and repeated pronoun. Also change 'with my family' to keep parallel structure. This improves clarity and grammaticality.

× And sometimes I wrote about them in my diary or some notebooks because they helps me remember them a lot of time.

✓ And sometimes I write about them in my diary or in some notebooks because they help me remember them for a long time.

The verb tense should match habitual action so present simple 'write' is appropriate. 'They helps' is wrong subject-verb agreement; use 'they help'. Use 'in my diary or in some notebooks' and 'for a long time' instead of 'a lot of time'. This fixes article and agreement issues and improves natural phrasing.

× Yeah, sure. I love share with my friends, with my family because I think it's so interesting for your listeners and I wanna listing their opinions with some thoughts for that I share them.

✓ Yeah, sure. I love sharing them with my friends and my family because I think they're interesting to listeners, and I want to listen to their opinions and share my thoughts.

Use the gerund 'sharing' after 'love'. 'I wanna listing' is incorrect; use 'I want to listen' (infinitive) and 'their opinions' is fine. Also change 'for your listeners' to 'to listeners' and fix pronoun and verb forms. This corrects verb+ -ing use and incorrect verb forms.

× Yes, I can say and they are have some meaning and I think it's depends on personality and if they thought about some important thing like the problems there were some situation they can give some advices or some reason or some some reasons for their situation.

✓ Yes, I would say they have some meaning, and I think it depends on a person's personality. If someone thinks about an important issue or problem, their dreams can give some advice or reasons for their situation.

Replace 'are have' with 'have' and use 'I would say' or 'I can say' appropriately. Use present simple 'depends' and correct pronouns ('a person's' or 'someone'). 'Advices' is uncountable; use 'advice'. Simplify sentence structure to avoid repetition. This fixes present tense issues, pronoun use, and noun form errors.

× Yes, I have one dream that I wanna see my reality and I've talked about this to my friends and I think it's very important for me because I it was my big dream and I wanna see it in the future.

✓ Yes, I have one dream that I want to see become reality. I've talked about it with my friends, and I think it's very important to me because it has been my big dream and I want to see it happen in the future.

Use full forms 'want to' not 'wanna' in formal correction. 'See my reality' is unnatural; use 'see become reality' or 'see it come true'. 'I've talked about this to my friends' should be 'talked about it with my friends'. Use present perfect 'has been' to show continuing state. This corrects misuse of participles and improves tense consistency.

× I think it's umm, very, very good, uh to imagine our future and plan to plan to get them.

✓ I think it's very good to imagine our future and make plans to achieve our goals.

Remove filler words. 'Plan to plan to get them' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'make plans to achieve our goals' for clarity. Replace 'them' with 'our goals' and correct article and noun usage. This fixes sentence structure and article/noun clarity.