广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct tense and singular/plural forms, start with a clear topic sentence, and add one specific sensory detail. Also avoid redundancy and keep within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas.

範例: Yes. When I was a child, a snack commercial called “The Texture Cool” impressed me because it aired on TV every day. The ad used bright colors and a funny mascot, which made the snack look and sound delicious. As a result, I often asked my mother to buy it.

建議: Correct factual and geographic mistakes, use precise vocabulary, and organize answer with a clear topic sentence plus a reason. Avoid incorrect city-country/place references. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and be specific about locations and types of ads.

範例: Yes, I do. In Guangzhou I often see many adverts on buses, subways and at the airport because public transport and terminals are high-traffic places. For example, airport billboards and posters on trains commonly promote airlines and travel services.

建議: Fix grammar and coherence, avoid repetition, and give one clear example of how ads bother you. Use linking words (for example, so, therefore) and correct word choice.

範例: Not really. I dislike many advertisements because they interrupt videos and break my concentration. For example, I subscribe to YouTube Premium so I can watch content without ads and enjoy videos without interruption.

建議: Use correct noun-verb agreement and clearer phrasing. Provide one specific reason and a concrete example of a product. Replace vague expressions ("sweet my skin") with specific benefits ("suitable for my skin").

範例: I prefer cosmetics advertisements because they help me discover suitable skincare products. For example, after seeing an ad for a moisturizing cream that claimed to be gentle and hydrating, I decided to try it and it worked well for my dry skin.

建議: Improve grammar and word order, and be concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a reason and a specific example. Use linking words (because, for example) and correct phrasing (targeted ads).

範例: Yes, I do. I often see many ads on my phone, especially on social media like Instagram and Facebook, because these platforms show targeted ads based on my interests. For example, I frequently get sponsored posts for clothing brands similar to ones I have viewed.

× When I was kids, I saw a snack advertisement called The Texture Cool on TV every day, so I used to ask my mom to buy it.

✓ When I was a kid, I saw a snack advertisement called The Texture Cool on TV every day, so I used to ask my mom to buy it.

'Kids' is plural but the time expression 'when I was' requires a singular noun 'a kid' to refer to the speaker's childhood. Use 'a kid' for one person's childhood. Suggestion: use 'a kid' or 'young' depending on style.

× The commercial had bright color and attractive funny character which made the snacks seems more tasty.

✓ The commercial had bright colors and an attractive, funny character, which made the snacks seem tastier.

Several issues: 'color' should be plural 'colors' to match general description; 'attractive funny character' needs an article and a comma between adjectives: 'an attractive, funny character'; 'seems' should be base form 'seem' after 'made' (causative structure); 'more tasty' is less natural than comparative 'tastier'. Suggestion: ensure noun-adjective agreement, use correct verb forms after causative verbs, and use standard comparative forms.

× Absolutely yes, because I live in Guangzhou which is located in Seoul.

✓ Absolutely yes, but I don't live in Seoul; I live in Guangzhou.

The original sentence incorrectly states location using 'located in Seoul' which conflicts; also 'which is located in Seoul' is a wrong prepositional locative for Guangzhou. Clarify correct location. Suggestion: State the correct city and avoid contradictory relative clauses.

× My city has Umm Kimpo airport so I saw a lot of advertisement to transportation especially airplane.

✓ My city has Gimpo Airport, so I see a lot of advertisements on transportation, especially airplanes.

Multiple structure issues: 'Umm Kimpo' seems wrong name (likely 'Gimpo'); tense should match habitual present 'see' instead of 'saw'; 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements'; use preposition 'on' for advertising on transportation; 'airplane' should be plural 'airplanes' or 'on airplanes'. Suggestion: use consistent tense, correct place names, and correct prepositions.

× I don't like advertisement because they often interrupt me when I'm watching YouTube.

✓ I don't like advertisements because they often interrupt me when I'm watching YouTube.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' when speaking generally. Also 'they' refers to plural, so use plural noun. Suggestion: use plural when referring to ads in general.

× For example, I usually subscribe to YouTube premium so I can watch a video with no advertisement to sue I enjoy my YouTube.

✓ For example, I usually subscribe to YouTube Premium so I can watch videos with no advertisements, so I can enjoy YouTube.

Problems: 'YouTube premium' should be capitalized 'YouTube Premium' (proper noun), 'a video' should be plural 'videos' for general statement, 'advertisement' should be plural, 'to sue' is incorrect - likely 'so', and word order 'so I enjoy my YouTube' awkward; use 'so I can enjoy YouTube.' Suggestion: check word choice and conjunctions, use plural for general statements, and correct 'so' instead of 'sue'.

× I like cosmetics ad because they helps me discover new product that's sweet my skin.

✓ I like cosmetics ads because they help me discover new products that suit my skin.

Errors: 'cosmetics ad' should be plural 'cosmetics ads'; 'they helps' wrong subject-verb agreement — use 'they help'; 'new product' should be plural 'new products' when general; 'that's sweet my skin' is incorrect: 'suit my skin' means suitable. Suggestion: match plural nouns and verbs, and use correct verb 'suit' for compatibility.

× For example, recently I watched moisture skin advertisement to so I bought it.

✓ For example, recently I saw an advertisement for moisturizing skin products, so I bought one.

Problems: 'watched moisture skin advertisement to' is ungrammatical. Use 'saw an advertisement for moisturizing skin products'; 'moisture' should be 'moisturizing' or 'moisturizer'; include article 'an' and fix 'so I bought it' to 'so I bought one' or 'so I bought it' referring back correctly. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and prepositions 'advertisement for', and specify what you bought.

× Absolutely yes. I often see a lot of advertisement on my phone especially on social media like Instagram or Facebook because this platform use targeted commercial based on my interest by.

✓ Absolutely yes. I often see a lot of advertisements on my phone, especially on social media like Instagram or Facebook, because these platforms use targeted commercials based on my interests.

Multiple errors: 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements'; 'this platform' should be plural 'these platforms' when naming multiple sites; 'use' must agree 'use' is correct with plural; 'targeted commercial' should be plural 'targeted commercials' or 'targeted ads'; 'based on my interest by' wrong word order — use 'based on my interests.' Suggestion: ensure number agreement, correct pluralization, and proper prepositional phrase order.