礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 응답이 여러 문법 실수와 부자연스러운 표현으로 구성되어 있어 명확성이 떨어집니다. 문장은 주어-동사 일치와 시제에 맞게 고쳐야 하고, 불필요한 단어(um, so they 등)를 줄여 간결하게 말하세요. 또한 구체적인 예시(어떤 친구에게, 어떤 제품인지)를 덧붙여 내용을 풍부하게 하세요. 연결어(For example, Sometimes, Especially)를 사용해 흐름을 개선하세요.

範例: Yes, I often give small gifts to my close friends. For example, I usually buy coffee gift cards or skincare products. I give these presents on special occasions like birthdays or when they need encouragement.

建議: 문장이 반복적이고 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 먼저 직접적으로 질문에 답하는 주제문을 말한 뒤, 구체적 상황(예: 생일, 승리 축하)과 이유를 덧붙이세요. 연결어(For example, Usually, For special occasions)를 사용해 논리적으로 이어가면 좋습니다.

範例: Usually I give gifts on special occasions. For example, I give presents for birthdays or when a friend wins a competition, such as a judo tournament, to celebrate their achievement.

建議: 핵심 아이디어는 있지만 문법과 어휘 선택이 부정확합니다. 'recipient’s preference'를 명확히 말하고, 구체적 예(옷, 향수 등)를 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 연결어(If they like..., so I choose...)를 사용해 이유를 설명하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

範例: I usually think about the recipient’s preferences. If a friend likes clothes, I might buy a nice sweater, and if they prefer fragrances, I would choose perfume based on their taste.

建議: 짧고 솔직한 답변은 좋지만 어색한 표현과 반복이 있습니다. 'I’m not good at making handmade items'처럼 자연스럽게 말하고, 대신 무엇을 주는지(기프트 카드, 현금)와 그 이유를 구체적으로 덧붙이세요. 연결어(So, Instead)를 사용해 대체 방식을 명확히 하세요.

範例: No, I’m not good at making handmade items. Instead, I usually give gift cards or money because my friends seem to appreciate the flexibility of choosing what they want.

建議: 의견은 분명하지만 문장이 어색하고 중복이 있습니다. 'expensive gifts do not necessarily show true feelings'라는 주제문을 사용하고, 이유(생각과 실용성)와 간단한 예를 덧붙이세요. 연결어(Besides, Also)를 써 논리적으로 전개하세요.

範例: No, I don't think expensive gifts show true feelings. I believe thoughtfulness matters more; for example, a useful or personalized present often means more than an expensive one.

× Yes, sometimes I giving a gift with my best friends like gift accounts such as coffee or other products umm so sometimes I give gift cones about special events like birthday. So they.

✓ Yes, sometimes I give gifts to my best friends, such as coffee or other products, and sometimes I give gifts for special events like birthdays.

Student used the continuous form 'giving' incorrectly; after 'sometimes' simple present 'give' is required for habitual actions. Plural forms 'gifts' and 'birthdays' are needed. Also change word order and prepositions: 'give gifts to someone' and 'for special events'. Suggestions: use simple present for routines, pluralize countable nouns when appropriate, and use 'for' with events.

× About friends first day or special event to my friends such as winning the competition about Judo. So this special event and this venture events I give many gifts to them.

✓ I give gifts to friends on their birthday or for special events, such as winning a judo competition. For these special occasions I give them many gifts.

Incorrect prepositions: use 'on' for days (on their birthday), 'for' for events, and 'to' for recipients. 'About Judo' is wrong; use 'a judo competition' or 'in judo'. 'Venture events' is unclear; use 'occasions'. Suggestions: choose appropriate prepositions ('on', 'for', 'to'), use articles for singular nouns, and use clear nouns for occasions.

× About the France type such as the friends like to bear a close or. He wanted to give my presents like perfume, so I considered it.

✓ I think about the person's preferences, for example whether friends like to wear clothes. If he wanted a present like perfume, I would consider that.

Pronoun and noun references are unclear and incorrect: 'the France type' is meaningless, 'friends like to bear a close' is incorrect phrasing. 'He wanted to give my presents' misuses pronouns. Suggestions: refer clearly to 'the person's preferences', use 'wear clothes', and keep pronouns consistent (he/I/they) and match verbs accordingly.

× Uh, no, I'm not good at hand making about making some products, so I just give uh, gift accounts or to give up money because they feel more happy to give like it.

✓ No, I'm not good at making handmade items, so I usually give gift cards or money because they are happier to receive them.

Incorrect gerund and noun forms: 'hand making about making' should be 'making handmade items' (gerund 'making' after 'good at'). 'Gift accounts' is wrong; likely 'gift cards'. 'To give up money' is wrong; use 'give money'. Also pronoun agreement: 'they are happier to receive them'. Suggestions: use 'good at + -ing' structure, correct vocabulary (gift cards), and ensure pronouns agree with antecedents.

× No, I don't think so. Money is not equal their their minds so it's more better about our minds and is this gives more helpful or useful to other friends is more important.

✓ No, I don't think so. Money does not reflect their feelings; sincerity is more important, and giving something helpful or useful to friends matters more.

Multiple structural errors: 'Money is not equal their their minds' is ungrammatical; use 'does not reflect their feelings'. 'More better' is redundant; use 'more important' or 'better'. 'Is this gives more helpful or useful to other friends' is incorrect structure; rephrase to 'giving something helpful or useful to friends matters more'. Suggestions: avoid redundant comparative forms, use clear verbs like 'reflect', and restructure sentences to present one idea at a time.