礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (verb forms, articles) and avoid redundancy.

範例: Not really. I find choosing gifts difficult, so I usually ask close friends for advice. For example, last month a friend helped me pick a watch for my cousin because she knows his style.

建議: Give a direct and structured answer: name key occasions, then add a specific example. Use correct nouns and prepositions and avoid unclear phrases like 'wedding locations.'

範例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays, Mother's Day and weddings. For instance, I always buy a small present for my mother on Mother's Day and a card for close friends on their birthdays.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and expand with specific criteria and linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'so'). Mention practical factors such as recipient's taste, age or interests to make your answer more informative.

範例: I consider how much I care about the person and their interests. For example, because my sister loves reading, I usually choose books or a nice bookmark to show my affection.

建議: Organise your answer with a simple topic sentence and two supporting details: what you made and why it mattered. Use clearer phrasing and correct tense and pronouns.

範例: Yes. I once painted a landscape for my mother as a handmade gift. She loved it because it reminded her of a place we visited together.

建議: Give a clear opinion first, then explain with reasons and an example. Use correct grammar and linking words like 'because' or 'however' to make your argument coherent.

範例: I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better because sincere thoughtfulness matters more. For example, a cheap but thoughtful handmade card meant more to my friend than an expensive but impersonal present.

× No, not at all.

✓ No, not at all.

This sentence is short but acceptable; no change needed. (Included for completeness, no grammar error matched.)

× I'm not really good at giving gifts, but most of the time if I need to give gifts, I'm taking help from my friends so that they can help me in choosing a gift to give someone such as my cousins or my other friends.

✓ I'm not really good at giving gifts, but most of the time if I need to give one, I ask my friends to help me choose a present for someone, such as my cousins or other friends.

Original contains awkward structure and incorrect verb form 'I'm taking help' (use simple present 'I ask' or 'I get help'). Also wordiness and repetition ('give gifts' repeated). Suggest using 'one' or 'a present' for concision and 'ask my friends to help me choose' for natural expression.

× Usually I use the important days such as Mother's Day for moms, Father's Day, Father in birthdays or wedding locations.

✓ Usually I give gifts on important days such as Mother's Day for mothers, Father's Day for fathers, birthdays, or at weddings.

Incorrect preposition 'use' should be 'give gifts on'. 'Father in birthdays' is ungrammatical; use 'birthdays'. 'Wedding locations' is unnatural; use 'at weddings'. Also match nouns 'moms' -> 'mothers' for formality and parallelism.

× I consider my feelings and love for them while choosing a gift.

✓ I consider my feelings and how much I love them when choosing a gift.

The sentence is understandable but can be improved: 'while choosing' is acceptable but 'when choosing' is more natural. Also 'my feelings and love for them' is awkward; rephrase to 'my feelings and how much I love them' to be clearer.

× I remember that to my mother, I gave her a handmade gift.

✓ I remember that I gave my mother a handmade gift.

Word order and unnecessary preposition 'to' before 'my mother' is incorrect. Use direct object 'my mother' after the verb. 'I remember that I gave my mother a handmade gift' is clear and grammatically correct.

× It's a painting, landscape painting.

✓ It was a landscape painting.

Use past tense 'was' to match context. 'Landscape painting' should be treated as a noun phrase; 'a landscape painting' is concise. Remove redundant comma.

× I painted her as well from back.

✓ I painted it from the back as well.

The original 'I painted her as well from back' wrongly uses 'her' (person) whereas the painting is an object. Use 'it' to refer to the painting, and 'from the back' is proper prepositional phrase. Order 'from the back' after the verb is natural.

× So that was the only gift I gave to my mom as a handmade gift.

✓ So that was the only handmade gift I ever gave my mom.

Word order and redundancy 'gift... as a handmade gift' should be simplified. Use 'ever' for emphasis if intended and omit unnecessary 'to' before 'my mom'.

× According to my point of view, it's depend on the on love and feelings and how I'm preferring myself rather than the price of the gift.

✓ In my point of view, it depends on love and feelings and on my personal preferences rather than on the price of the gift.

Multiple errors: 'it's depend' should be 'it depends' (subject-verb agreement and present tense). Extra 'the on' removed. 'how I'm preferring myself' is ungrammatical; use 'my personal preferences'. Also include proper prepositions 'depends on'. 'In my point of view' is acceptable though 'from my point of view' or 'in my opinion' are more natural.