金钱— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장 구조와 시제 사용을 정확히 하세요. 예를 들어 'when I was an elementary school student'와 같이 관사와 어순을 고치고, 'to buy a snack'와 같이 단수/복수를 정확히 해야 합니다. 또한 응답을 더 자연스럽게 하기 위해 주제 문장 뒤에 연결어(then, after that)와 구체적 세부사항(얼마나 빌렸는지, 왜 바로 갚았는지)을 덧붙이세요. 답변 길이는 2~4문장 내로 유지하세요.

範例: Yes. When I was an elementary school student, I borrowed a small amount of money from a friend to buy a snack after class. I gave it back the next day because we were close and I felt responsible.

建議: 시제와 문장 명확성을 개선하세요. 현재·과거 혼용을 피하고 한 시제를 유지하세요. 예를 들어 'Yes, I once lent money to a friend'로 시작하고 이유와 결과를 논리적으로 연결하기 위해 접속사(so, because)를 사용하세요. 또한 어색한 표현('I'll lend some money to a friend, she said')은 제거하고 구체적 금액이나 상황을 추가하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

範例: Yes, I once lent money to a friend who didn't have enough to pay for the bus, so I gave her some cash. She reimbursed me the next day, which made the whole situation stress-free.

× Yes, when I was on elementary school student I once borrowed some money from a friend to buy snack after school.

✓ Yes, when I was an elementary school student, I once borrowed some money from a friend to buy a snack after school.

The noun phrases need correct articles and singular/plural forms. Use 'an elementary school student' (singular with article) and 'a snack' (singular count noun requires an article). Also add a comma for clarity.

× I paid her back the next day.

✓ I paid her back the next day.

Sentence is grammatically correct in past tense; no change needed. It properly uses past simple for completed action. (Included for completeness.)

× Yes, I'll lend some money to a friend, she said.

✓ Yes, I lent some money to a friend, she said.

Reported speech about a past event should use past tense. Change 'I'll lend' (future) to 'I lent' (past) to match the time of the action being reported by 'she said.'

× She didn't have enough money to pay for the bus, so I gave her some cash and she paid me next day.

✓ She didn't have enough money to pay for the bus, so I gave her some cash and she paid me the next day.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'next day' to form the phrase 'the next day.' This is a fixed temporal expression in English. Also the rest of the sentence is correct in past tense.