聚会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, correct grammar, and give a clear reason with one or two supporting details. Use a topic sentence, then one supporting reason with linking words. Avoid redundancy and fix verb forms and articles.

範例: No, I don’t enjoy going to parties. As an introvert, I prefer quiet evenings at home because large gatherings make me feel drained, so I usually decline invitations to family functions.

建議: Answer directly about frequency, use correct tense for past habits, and provide one specific example. Use linking words like “usually” or “often” and correct past forms.

範例: When I was a child, we usually had parties on weekends. For example, we often celebrated birthdays and festival events at my parents’ house, and I would attend them with my family.

建議: Use past tense consistently and be concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific details (what you did and how it went), linked with words like “for example” or “then”. Correct article and preposition use.

範例: Yes, I once organized a surprise birthday party for my husband. I decorated the living room with balloons and colorful lights, prepared his favorite cake, and invited close friends, so he was very surprised and happy.

× No, I don't like to going on parties and I avoid attending parties because I am a introvert person and probably I avoid gatherings and family functions.

✓ No, I don't like going to parties, and I avoid attending them because I am an introvert and I usually avoid gatherings and family functions.

Errors: 'don't like to going' mixes infinitive with -ing form; correct pattern is 'don't like' + gerund (going). 'going on parties' uses wrong preposition; correct is 'going to parties'. 'a introvert person' uses incorrect article and redundant noun; use 'an introvert' or 'an introverted person'. 'probably I avoid' is awkward; 'I usually avoid' is clearer. Suggestion: Use 'don't like' + verb-ing, use 'to' for destination (go to a place/event), use 'an' before vowel sound, and prefer concise phrases (an introvert).

× No, I don't like to going on parties and I avoid attending parties because I am a introvert person and probably I avoid gatherings and family functions.

✓ No, I don't like going to parties, and I avoid attending them because I am an introvert and I usually avoid gatherings and family functions.

Error: 'parties' plural is fine but referring back should use a pronoun: 'attending them' instead of repeating 'attending parties'. Suggestion: Use a pronoun to avoid repetition and ensure number agreement.

× No, I don't like to going on parties and I avoid attending parties because I am a introvert person and probably I avoid gatherings and family functions.

✓ No, I don't like going to parties, and I avoid attending them because I am an introvert and I usually avoid gatherings and family functions.

Error: 'a introvert person' uses the indefinite article 'a' before a vowel sound; must use 'an'. Also 'introvert person' is awkward; better to say 'an introvert' or 'an introverted person'. Suggestion: Use 'an' before words beginning with vowel sounds and prefer natural noun/adjective combinations.

× In my childhood on weekend days I was had a party. When there is some occasion like birthday parties function or some events then I attend it with my parents.

✓ In my childhood, on weekends I had parties. When there was an occasion, like a birthday or another event, I attended it with my parents.

Errors: 'I was had a party' incorrectly mixes past 'was' with past participle; correct simple past is 'I had parties.' 'on weekend days' is unidiomatic; use 'on weekends'. Second sentence mixes present and past: 'When there is' should be past 'When there was', and 'I attend' should be 'I attended' to match past time frame. Also 'birthday parties function' is incorrect word order; use 'a birthday' or 'a birthday party'. Suggestion: Use simple past for habitual actions in the past and correct noun phrases ('a birthday', 'an event').

× In my childhood on weekend days I was had a party. When there is some occasion like birthday parties function or some events then I attend it with my parents.

✓ In my childhood, on weekends I had parties. When there was an occasion, like a birthday or another event, I attended it with my parents.

Errors: 'on weekend days' should be 'on weekends'. 'attend it with my parents' is acceptable but 'attended them with my parents' (matching plural) or 'attended with my parents' is better. Suggestion: Use common prepositional phrases ('on weekends') and ensure prepositions match idiomatic usage.

× Yes, once I organize a birthday party for my husband that day. I organize a surprise event for my husband at evening at my home and I decorate all the room with balloons and colorful lights.

✓ Yes, once I organized a birthday party for my husband. I organized a surprise event for him in the evening at my home and decorated the whole room with balloons and colorful lights.

Errors: The response describes a past event but uses present tense 'organize' and 'decorate'. Use simple past 'organized' and 'decorated'. 'at evening' is incorrect preposition; use 'in the evening'. 'all the room' should be 'the whole room' or 'the entire room'. Suggestion: For past events, use simple past verbs and correct prepositions ('in the evening') and natural quantifiers ('the whole room').

× Yes, once I organize a birthday party for my husband that day. I organize a surprise event for my husband at evening at my home and I decorate all the room with balloons and colorful lights.

✓ Yes, once I organized a birthday party for my husband. I organized a surprise event for him in the evening at my home and decorated the whole room with balloons and colorful lights.

Errors: Repeating 'my husband' is redundant; better to use the pronoun 'him' on second mention. Also 'that day' is unnecessary and awkward. Suggestion: Use pronouns to avoid repetition and remove redundant time phrases.